A TICKET FOR A WEAK!!!!!!!! week

A ticket full of dreams ,full of exciting things, Ithink france is the best place for going.... ???

I love france, paris,b ecause bIts for lovers!!!!!,I really love to see eifel tower, madame tussaud,s museum(wax model museum).....

 

My dear Asma,

 

Your paragraph has only one topic and one support. If it is so exiting, why wouldn’t you provide more details? In addition, none of the names had capital letters. There were also some misspellings. I expect more of you. I hope to read a more improved paragraph in your next writing.

 

Yours,

Nami